Talk:Eternal Light

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If you don't mind, I'd like to change it a bit. Yours; ' A slight breeze bristled in the distance. The sun shone through the leafy trees.' Mine; 'A slight breeze made ripples in the lush, grass of a distant feild. The sun made flickering dapples on the ground, under the canopy of the beautiful Autumn leaves, and as the breeze reached the forest and ruffled the leaves, it made a scraping noise, common in the fall. As the birds flitted across the tree-tops, the squirrels scolded at them when they came close, the sparrows would bring seeds across the streams to their young, and the fish would jump from waters to catch the dropped treats, bears would catch the fish, bear cubs would kick up rabbits as they played, rabbits would bound by the deer with their thumping feet, but the deer would pay no mind, flicking their ears, listening for wolves, quietly-- no, silently --eating the sweet buds from the late blooming plants, stripping the bark from saplings. Fawns would play together, high stepping and cheerful, and the bucks would fight, clattering horns, attracting mates. Does would keep watch, some would eat as others held their heads high, keeping a watchful eye and a sharp ear, carefully picking out any sounds or sights that could mean danger, flagging their tails and letting out a short, alarmed bray, and the herd would be off, occasionally nudging the fawns to go faster, stopping when they thought they were safe.' Maybe a little too long though. >.<

Wow, thanks. That's really descriptive! Redclawofmsc (talk) 22:04, October 11, 2014 (UTC)